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    You are one
    Of the whole
    Unto the sun

    Art to the soul
    Rose to the bees
    Earth to the trees

    Lace to the breeze
    Of beauty and grace
    Vacant of hate
    Eyes of an angel
    Darling so great
...i gotta cure this writer's block somehow.
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ThePixiesMuse Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this-the rhyme isn't trying too hard and overall the whole effect is so gentle and calming. It makes me feel loved :3 ^^
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remanth Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautifully written. It reminds me of a style I learned called skeletal style. I love the imagery and the words flow very easily.
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pytryseck Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
lovely words for somebody special
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Writer
How deeply simple. But hey, at least you can come up with something nice even with writer's block. I like the phrase 'vacant of hate'. Something about just really clicks with me.
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Rouge-Fox Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Writer
Well if writer's block is the disease of the writer you have proven to be the doctor with this sweet piece, certainly solved my slump.
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TheiaMaby Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You have an interesting style, I like it.
What do you mean with "lace to the breeze" ? I couldn't translate it well, sry maybe my fault. But all in all good work!

If you have a writers block, I've a little hint or trick:

1. Think about a feeling you want to write about
2. Type the word you thing about now in the deviant art browser (maybe "sad" or "funny" or "angry")
3. Take the most beautiful or interesting picture you find and write about it (lyric or prose doesn't matter)
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odinify Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Thanks.
"lace to the breeze" imagine delicate woven fabric as in lace curtains of an open window, moved by the breeze, but defining the breeze itself.
The lace makes you notice the breeze as the breeze makes you notice the lace.
One without the other isn't the beautiful thing that,together they become.
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TheiaMaby Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I see, thanks !
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LunarLAG Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this! Simple, cute, and romantic. Very easy to relate to, since everyone's got that one person that's perfect to them :P
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